Here's my review of Fraxia and what I've read so far.
It's not bad, but it needs more improvements in the story presented, as some events feel rushed at times.
However, I must admit the novel creates a sad atmosphere, particularly the protagonist's isolation from the world, which makes one empathize with him.
Regarding the characters, I'll only mention two since they're the most relevant.
The father, while he sometimes seems to play a significant role because he knows the real reasons why the protagonist can't leave and must keep him protected, the story doesn't take full advantage of this situation and mostly focuses on the protagonist's daily life. There could be more interactions, or even for the protagonist to investigate at least a little before uncovering the truth.
As for the best friend of the protagonist, I also see her as somewhat neutral. As the story progresses, there isn't much connection with her, and she comes across more as a problem due to the various bad situations she gets the protagonist into.
But of course, there are certain good moments that help him stand out, helping the protagonist become more confident and bringing some happiness to his world.
I hope there will be more good times with her if the opportunity arises. Great job!
This help us to significantly improve the VN in future updates.
We are already working hard on fixing the pace of this chapter. So far the fix version will include over 3k new words, adding new scenes, and slowing down others so they don´t feel too rushed.
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Here's my review of Fraxia and what I've read so far.
It's not bad, but it needs more improvements in the story presented, as some events feel rushed at times.
However, I must admit the novel creates a sad atmosphere, particularly the protagonist's isolation from the world, which makes one empathize with him.
Regarding the characters, I'll only mention two since they're the most relevant.
The father, while he sometimes seems to play a significant role because he knows the real reasons why the protagonist can't leave and must keep him protected, the story doesn't take full advantage of this situation and mostly focuses on the protagonist's daily life. There could be more interactions, or even for the protagonist to investigate at least a little before uncovering the truth.
As for the best friend of the protagonist, I also see her as somewhat neutral. As the story progresses, there isn't much connection with her, and she comes across more as a problem due to the various bad situations she gets the protagonist into.
But of course, there are certain good moments that help him stand out, helping the protagonist become more confident and bringing some happiness to his world.
I hope there will be more good times with her if the opportunity arises. Great job!
Thank you for sharing your thoughts! ^^
This help us to significantly improve the VN in future updates.
We are already working hard on fixing the pace of this chapter. So far the fix version will include over 3k new words, adding new scenes, and slowing down others so they don´t feel too rushed.
Hope you have a good end of the year <3
About to start reading <3
This vn is amazing! the story is written very nice, Hope you are doing good and keep up the good work! cant wait for the next chapter.
Thank you a lot for your kind words! We are happy you liked it.
We are doing fantastic, working on the fix update for chapter one and also preparing for the development of chapter two.
will be back to share my thoughts later
We hope you like it!
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